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Saturday, February 9, 2013

Looking for a Title

I'm looking for a title for this piece:

What is beauty, the glow of the candle?
On a cold day, the blow of the candle--

warmth in the restaurant that is stirred,
loving gaze, in our eyes goes the candle,

Outside, the white sprinkles the streets,
attention away melting snow from the candle--

our hearts melt instead, in silence felt,
emanating, a peaceful flow from the candle.

Jessica, a voice that longingly reassures,
Did I? Maybe I found my beau in the candle?


Maybe Candlelight would work?


Oh, my In Memory of Nan poem received a really good review from someone in my poetry class:



Hi Jessica,
I love both of your poems! The one I’m going to talk about though is “In Memory.” I like how your poem seems very real and honest. It does really feel like someone looking back on to a series of memories with someone close to them. The only thing I can say is you could hint more about who it is you’re talking about. I’m very curious to know more specifically, but perhaps that wasn’t your intent. Either way it is a great poem and I look forward to reading more of yours.

2 comments:

  1. Yes. "Candlelight", while simple, is a fitting name for this piece.

    Congratulations on the review! :)

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    1. Sometimes simple is the best. :)

      Thank you. I have to type a short story now. Lately I've had short story writer's block.

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